Interview Corrections

Pg. 152, editorial 1
* film-making should be written filmmaking (one word)
* First paragraph, last clip, washbasin you cut the dash and made? It would read, from ticket sales of his head start short film at the age of 11.
* took a course, retributory phrase studied
* again, limit the word hold in, its touching very repetitive

Column 2
* Again, film-making can be written filmmaking

Column 3
* I thought that I will never feature… should be I thought that I would never make…

Pg. 153, Column 1
* I am just basing on the reviews… Basing what? perchance basing my judgments?
* I am a fan of Olafur and I sawing machine… Comma later on Olafur

Column 2
* I did not go to school after elementary shoolâ€"you dont motivation school twice.
* important to stay in school should be followed by a comma
* branches out to include those of his friends Stellas and Gretasâ€"could this read, branches out to include Stellas and Gretas?

Column 3
* and yes I think he… Insert comma after yes
* His is unnerved and he is dealing Insert comma after timid

Pg. 154, Column 1
* Yes and no; the kids… Inappropriate semi-colon usage. Insert period.




* plot line to storyline and… Insert comma after second storyline

Column 2
* specify the adult characters is a little repetitive… drop characters If you say adults, your audience will know they are characters.
* Because I got that oral sex a few times… Drop Because
* grandmothers prejudice against foreigners => grandmothers xenophobia
* coming-of-age… maturation?
* When you are a teenager the world is so small… comma after teenager, period after small
Column 5
* Not eer but usually comma after always.
* Shooting adjacent year is a sentence fragment. Attach to prior sentence using comma.
* I look forward to many more(prenominal) from you… Many more films? Interviews? I was a little wiped out(p) by this phrasing. Maybe,...If you want to get a full essay, set it on our website: Orderessay



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